WRITING PART 1 (lanjutan)

Ini tulisan lanjutan dari writing part 1.
Kali ini langsung aja saya kasih liat semua susunannya dari Introduction, body sama conclusionnya yaa.

THE TOURISM PLACES IN JAYAPURA

            Jayapura is famous as one of the beautiful cities in Papua. It has many beautiful tourism places. Majority of the tourism places relate to water such as beaches and lake. The beaches which are often visited by tourists are Base-G, Tablanusu, Hamai, and Harlen. The most beautiful tourism place in Jayapura is the lake, Danau Sentani. The tourism places are often visited by the tourists and also Papuan for taking pictures. It takes about 10 minutes to arrive in Base-G by a public transportation from the central Jayapura. To arrive in Danau Sentani, Tablanusu, Hamai and Harlen take about more than 1hour from the central Jayapura

            Base-G, Tablanusu, Hamai, and Harlen have beautiful green view. There are many trees especially coconut trees around there. Those beaches have small huts which make tourists or visitors can relax after swimming, playing or do anything there. The beaches have each uniqueness. The uniqueness of Base-G is more often full of coral in the beach. So, even though people cannot swim but they can go to the deeper part of the beach. Hamai has beach and small river. The small river is green and cool. It is so deep too. Harlen beach has white sand. In Tablanusu, there is no sand but there are rocks near the beach. The color of the rocks is like asphalt. Tablanusu is very unique too because the water of the beach is green and cool like the water of the small river in Hamai. Danau Sentani has beautiful green view too, the same as in Base-G, Tablanusu, Hamai, and Harlen. Not only trees but also small mountains are around there. There are also small houses near the lake.

            But lately, some of the beaches do not look very beautiful. Such as Base-G and Hamai. The beaches look very dirty. They are never kept well. There is a lot of rubbish around there. It is caused by the visitors who are not responsible to the beaches. When visitors go to the beaches for picnic, they usually bring some snacks and soft drink. When they have finished eating, they usually throw the packs of snacks, cans of soft drink wherever they want to throw it. It is the reason why the beaches are not beautiful anymore. So, for the visitors who will go to the beaches, please keep the beaches well. Throw the rubbish in its place. If you do it, you will comfortable for swimming or do anything there.

 

Yang paragraf pertama itu udah dibahas kemarin kan jadi otomatis itu udah betul. Di part pertama itu saya nambah sedikit kalimat biar bisa tahu juga kesalahan2 yang ada :D

Nah, puji syukur dari tugas writing pertama ini saya dapat A tapi ditambahin – jadinya A- ^^ xxixiixiixi
ma’am saya menunjukkan kesalahan saya yaitu ada 2. Pada paragraf kedua dan ketiga.
Ini dia:

1. The beaches have each uniqueness. (Incorrect)
   - The beaches have uniqueness. (correct)

Kata ma’am, The beaches itu kan plural jadi pemberian “each” itu salah. Karena each itu bentuknya singular. Jadi nggak perlu pake each, cukup dengan The beaches have uniqueness.

2. you will comfortable for swimming or do anything there. (Incorrect)
   - you will be comfortable for swimming or do anything there (correct)

Kalau kalimat yang diatas yang pertama itu salah karena tidak ada penambahan be sebelum adjective. Kalimatnya setelah subject ada modal jadi sebelum adjective itu harus ditambahkan kata “be”. Kita nggak perlu menggunakan “be” jika ‘no modal’ setelah subject kalau yang ada itu  “to be (are)”.

SEKIAN ^^